Moderate Mammam Okay, so you have a janitorial service. The fact that you're environmentally friendly should be a plus. But the printers were doing you a favour, because your flyers won't work. You should drop everything after the phone number. I presume that you're essentially a start-up. Getting established will take some time, and a LOT of hard work. It's just the nature of things. So use the extra time to promote yourself. (And my recommendation would be to drop the "Less than most established services" line. It informs the prospect that you're not established. And also they might suppose that if they are paying "Less", they will get "Less" service.) Also, you might want to change "Superior" to "Excellent". And forget the politics. Business and politics don't mix. It gives your prospects the idea that you have a chip on your shoulder, and they will be much less likely to hire you. So why are you hiding the telephone #? This would be a plug for your business, no? (I see that you're in the Somerville, NJ area. I was out that way several weeks back. It had rained a lot, and I remember the Raritan river was at the top of its banks at Rutgers my alma mater.) -- Theodore A. Kaldis
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